Forum anglais: Questions sur l'anglais
Tout ce qui a un rapport avec l'apprentissage de l'anglais: grammaire, orthographe, aides aux devoirs, phrases etc.
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Message de choupie67 posté le 29-04-2006 à 13:28:55 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour à tous ! est ce que quelqu'un pourrait regarder mon texte et m'expliquer mes fautes de conjugaison ou autres fautessvp s'il vous plaît ? merci !
At first I would go with my family in australia . For visiting my uncle who lived in australia in the stats from sidney since twenty years.
So I didn't never have the occasion to see them.
I would restor to keep contact with old person what I have difficult to speak they.
My dream were that's I can read in the think from people.
In order to make them realize their dreams and that everobody would live happy. I also would like to suppress all the bad things that are destroying our world, and finally I would give everybody what they want and give them their smile back.
Everybody should profit of his life as much as he can
Finally, I would like to do whatever I want whenever I want, and that everybody could do so as long as they don't hurt anybody
If moreover I could have an enormous castle where everybody would be invited to have a really good time, that would be pretty cool!
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Modifié par bridg le 29-04-2006 13:29
Message de choupie67 posté le 29-04-2006 à 13:28:55 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour à tous ! est ce que quelqu'un pourrait regarder mon texte et m'expliquer mes fautes de conjugaison ou autres fautes
At first I would go with my family in australia . For visiting my uncle who lived in australia in the stats from sidney since twenty years.
So I didn't never have the occasion to see them.
I would restor to keep contact with old person what I have difficult to speak they.
My dream were that's I can read in the think from people.
In order to make them realize their dreams and that everobody would live happy. I also would like to suppress all the bad things that are destroying our world, and finally I would give everybody what they want and give them their smile back.
Everybody should profit of his life as much as he can
Finally, I would like to do whatever I want whenever I want, and that everybody could do so as long as they don't hurt anybody
If moreover I could have an enormous castle where everybody would be invited to have a really good time, that would be pretty cool!
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Modifié par bridg le 29-04-2006 13:29
Réponse: vérification''souhait' de zaza54, postée le 29-04-2006 à 20:51:19 (S | E)
Bonsoir choupie67,
Je vais essayer de reprendre ta rrédaction phrase par phrase. En effet, j'ai relevé pas mal d'erreurs :
je préfererais mettre : "First of all" plutôt que "At first"
australia : N'oublie pas que c'est un pays ==> Australia
for visiting ==> to visit
who lived ==> ton oncle vit en Australie depuis quelques années, donc utilise pour cela le "présent perfect" your uncle has lived
in australia in the stats of sidney ==> vu que tu as déjà précisé plus haut qu'il vivait en Australie, précise seulement "in the states of Sydney"
since 20 years ==> For + durée : For 20 years
Since + date : Since 1996
Ce qui donne : First of all, I would go with my family in Australia to visit my uncle who has lived in the states of Sydney for 20 years.
So I didn't never have : tu emploies 2 fois la négation : "didn't" et "never", mets I never had the occasion
I would restor to keep contact with old person what I have difficult to speak they : mets voir " I would restore contacts (il y en a plusieurs) with old people (one person, two people) which I had (c'était dans le passé) difficulties (tu en avais plusieurs) to speak with==> parler avec
Ce qui donne : I would restor contacts with old people which I had difficulties to speak with.
My dream were : soit tu as un rêve : my dream was, soit tu en a plusieurs : my dreams were
that's : le verbe "être" ou "avoir" n'a pas lieu d'être, "that" est un pronom relatif
in the think ==> to think: penser
the thought : les pensées
from people : of people : des gens
Ce qui donne : My dream was that i can read in the thought of people.
everobody : erreur de frappe : everybody
that are destroying = pas à ce moment précis mais tout le temps, donc that destroyed
Bon, je crois que ça doit être mieux. A +
Réponse: vérification''souhait' de choupie67, postée le 29-04-2006 à 21:34:48 (S | E)
MERCI ! la suite tout est correct ?
Réponse: vérification''souhait' de zaza54, postée le 30-04-2006 à 20:35:26 (S | E)
Il me semble que oui, choupie
Mais mine de rien, ça m'avait pris quand même pas mal de temps
A +
Réponse: vérification''souhait' de choupie67, postée le 30-04-2006 à 21:46:43 (S | E)
oui je pense bine vu le nombre de fautes ! merci d'avoir pris du temps !
Réponse: vérification''souhait' de js40run, postée le 02-05-2006 à 18:32:15 (S | E)
Hello
Just to say you: is there several or only one state of Sydney?
If there only one, so you have to write "State" of Sydney without S, isn't it?
Bye