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Message de angeliquemechta posté le 30-01-2011 à 18:24:34
Describe a humiliation
One day , I saw many boy at the bus stop.
By caution , I decided to waiting further.
A little time after, a girl arrived just next to the boys. My idea was better than her: One of the boys called her. " Hey girl ! " She didn't ask to him. He repeated his action. She had the same reaction.
Suddenly, a boy took a pebble and shoot the girl with this. Two of the boys made the same. I think it is an humiliation because the girl was stoned.
It was very shocking , the girl couldn't do anything , and neither do I.
I will always remember this scene. I had many chance.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 30-01-2011 19:33
Bonjour,
Merci d'utiliser les formules de politesse élémentaires (bonjour, s'il vous plaît, merci...).C'est un détail mais le site n'est pas une sorte de self-service, vous avez des bénévoles derrière l'écran.
Cordialement
Message de angeliquemechta posté le 30-01-2011 à 18:24:34
Describe a humiliation
One day , I saw many boy at the bus stop.
By caution , I decided to waiting further.
A little time after, a girl arrived just next to the boys. My idea was better than her: One of the boys called her. " Hey girl ! " She didn't ask to him. He repeated his action. She had the same reaction.
Suddenly, a boy took a pebble and shoot the girl with this. Two of the boys made the same. I think it is an humiliation because the girl was stoned.
It was very shocking , the girl couldn't do anything , and neither do I.
I will always remember this scene. I had many chance.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 30-01-2011 19:33
Bonjour,
Merci d'utiliser les formules de politesse élémentaires (bonjour, s'il vous plaît, merci...).C'est un détail mais le site n'est pas une sorte de self-service, vous avez des bénévoles derrière l'écran.
Cordialement
Réponse: Correction de 'describe' de notrepere, postée le 30-01-2011 à 18:40:25
Bonjour!Il me semble que votre traduction était créée par un traducteur automatique.
Réponse: Correction de 'describe' de laure95, postée le 30-01-2011 à 18:43:33
Bonsoir,
Voici ce que tu dois corriger:
Describe a humiliation
One day , I saw many boy (MANY + PLURIEL) at the bus stop.
By caution , I decided to waiting (TO + INFINITIF) further.
A little time after, a girl arrived just next to the boys. My idea was better than her: One of the boys called her. " Hey girl ! " She didn't ask to (ASK: demander) him. He repeated his action?. She had the same reaction.
Suddenly, a boy took a pebble and shoot the girl with this. Two of the boys made (did) the same. I think it is an humiliation because the girl was stoned.
It was very shocking , the girl couldn't do anything , and neither do (pas au bon temps) I.
I will always remember this scene. I had many chance.
