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Message de juliiee posté le 06-12-2008 à 19:39:44 (S | E | F)
, Bonsoir, je dois envoyé par mail cette conclusion pouvez vous l'a lire et me dire si il y a des fautes je vous remercie d'avance
Conclusion:
The police and the Parent have an important role in this society, both must protect young people.
Parents with the police lead a major role complementary since they help in education and prevention.
But yet, there are other structures that could play a role in this issue as the school who does not forget teaching rules and respect towards the others to have a social life.
Nevertheless, in spite of height of efforts, the young always commits faults.
We cannot redemption their faults, thus, it is necessary love them and to have a dialogue with them before it is too late!
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Modifié par bridg le 06-12-2008 19:41
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Message de juliiee posté le 06-12-2008 à 19:39:44 (S | E | F)
, Bonsoir, je dois envoyé par mail cette conclusion pouvez vous l'a lire et me dire si il y a des fautes je vous remercie d'avanceConclusion:
The police and the Parent have an important role in this society, both must protect young people.
Parents with the police lead a major role complementary since they help in education and prevention.
But yet, there are other structures that could play a role in this issue as the school who does not forget teaching rules and respect towards the others to have a social life.
Nevertheless, in spite of height of efforts, the young always commits faults.
We cannot redemption their faults, thus, it is necessary love them and to have a dialogue with them before it is too late!
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Modifié par bridg le 06-12-2008 19:41
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Réponse: Éducation et prévention (correction) de azer3, postée le 06-12-2008 à 20:22:40 (S | E)
Bon soir voici mon approche merci bein de vérifier.
Police and Parent have an important role in this society, both of them must protect young people.
Parents so the police lead a complementary major role since they have helped in education and prevention.
But yet, there are other structures that could play a role in this issue as the school who does not forget teaching/ to teach rules and respect towards others to have a social life.
Nevertheless, in spite of all this height efforts, young peaople always commit faults.
We can't redeem their faults, so, it is necessary to love them and to discuss with them before it become too late.
Attention au fautes de structuration(essayer de enlever les mots transitifs qui rend tes essais un peut compliqués, sois précise), au fautes de conjugaison (since implique l'emploi de "present perfect"), au fautes de grammaire (deux verbes qui se suivent le deuxième se met a l'infinitive).
