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Alicia keys (aide)
Message de audreygwada posté le 16-09-2007 à 22:25:07 (S | E | F | I)
Dans ma rédaction il faut se présenter comme si on était une célébrité. M oi j'ai choisi Alicia keys. Quelqu un pourrait-il m'aider au niveau de la construction grammaticale et de l'orthographe s'il vous plaît? Merci.
My names is ALICIA KEYS , i'm a singer afro-american of r&b and soul . I'm a pianist and actress from New York . My true name is Alicia Augello Cook Keys and i was born on january 25 th 1981 at New York . My mother is irlando-italian and my father is jamaico-portorican.They are separated . Since my childhood my mother accompanied me in my career musical. I began piano , i had approximately 5 years . At 16 years i sang then on the scene room and i recorted pieces for original film bands such as men in black and shaft. Afer long years makes an attemps my fisrt album left . It was true successes in france and the united states especially with my title "fallin" . In 2003 my second album witch is mixture of rap , rnb and hip hop which profited exelent critical . On the level of my cinematographic career , i played in smokin acess.In general my life is based on the music what makes ego the queen of the soul think you .
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Modifié par bridg le 16-09-2007 22:29
Ne criez pas en majuscules sur le site. Merci.
Message de audreygwada posté le 16-09-2007 à 22:25:07 (S | E | F | I)
Dans ma rédaction il faut se présenter comme si on était une célébrité. M oi j'ai choisi Alicia keys. Quelqu un pourrait-il m'aider au niveau de la construction grammaticale et de l'orthographe s'il vous plaît? Merci.
My names is ALICIA KEYS , i'm a singer afro-american of r&b and soul . I'm a pianist and actress from New York . My true name is Alicia Augello Cook Keys and i was born on january 25 th 1981 at New York . My mother is irlando-italian and my father is jamaico-portorican.They are separated . Since my childhood my mother accompanied me in my career musical. I began piano , i had approximately 5 years . At 16 years i sang then on the scene room and i recorted pieces for original film bands such as men in black and shaft. Afer long years makes an attemps my fisrt album left . It was true successes in france and the united states especially with my title "fallin" . In 2003 my second album witch is mixture of rap , rnb and hip hop which profited exelent critical . On the level of my cinematographic career , i played in smokin acess.In general my life is based on the music what makes ego the queen of the soul think you .
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Modifié par bridg le 16-09-2007 22:29
Ne criez pas en majuscules sur le site. Merci.
Réponse: Alicia keys (aide) de aud18, postée le 16-09-2007 à 23:10:17 (S | E)
Bonsoir ! Voilà quelques erreurs que tu peux déjà corriger :
- I'm a singer afro-american : ne dit-on pas "my english teacher..." ? Calque cette structure sur la tienne .
- my mother accompanied me : choisis un autre verbe ! ce que tu veux dire, c'est que sa mère l'a beaucoup ....(verbe anglais)dans sa carrière
- I began piano, I had approximatively 5 years. : il manque quelque chose non ? Un adverbe qui situerai dans le temps le fait qu'elle ait commencé le piano.
- à modifier : On the level of my cinematographic career et In general .
- relis-toi il y a des fautes d'orthographe !
Réponse: Alicia keys (aide) de TravisKidd, postée le 17-09-2007 à 02:11:31 (S | E)
Attention: Adjectives are placed before the noun they modify.
Réponse: Alicia keys (aide) de thileli29, postée le 17-09-2007 à 10:11:49 (S | E)
"thank you" s'écrit de cette façon et non comme tu l'as écrit.Bonne chance
Réponse: Alicia keys (aide) de nick27, postée le 17-09-2007 à 10:37:47 (S | E)
Voici encore quelques points à modifier:
My names is ALICIA KEYS , i 'm a singer afro-american of r&b and soul . I'm a pianist and XX actress from New York . My true name is Alicia Augello Cook Keys and i was born on january 25th 1981 at New York . My mother is irlando-italian and my father is jamaico-portorican.They are separated . Since my childhood my mother accompanied me in my career musical. I began piano , i had approximately 5 years . At 16 years i sang then on the scene room and i recorted pieces for original film bands such as men in black and shaft. Afer long years makes an attemps my fisrt album left ??? . It was true successes in france and XX the united states especially with my title "fallin" . In 2003 my second album witch is mixture of rap , rnb and hip hop which profited exelent critical . On the level of my cinematographic career , i played in smokin acess.In general my life is based on the music what makes ego the queen of the soul think you .
Il y a du travail.
