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Correction- A letter from New York
Message de lodi posté le 18-02-2009 à 17:30:15 (S | E | F)
Bonjour ! Je dois corriger une lettre qu'une personne à écrite à un ami (La personne étant à New York) Toutes les phrases ont quelques chose à corriger. Ce qui est en noir est la lettre d'origine et en vert ce que moi je pense être la meilleure tournure de phrase. Voici la lettre:
*)Hello, my friend Dear ...
*) Iwas arrived in New York since one week ago and I am very excited.
*) I amwas enthusiastic but and effrayed too.
*) It iswas a new life wich beganbegin.
*) Since I have arrived, I have done new friends.
*) Do you knowwhat is the "American Dream" ?
*) All of American citizens (Celle-la je n'ai pas compris la phrase)
*) I already likealready very much this island.
*) Sorry but I lef you. (Je ne sais pas ce que veux dire "lef", dans le dictionnaire il n'y a pas)
*) Iwould want to buy everything I see all that I saw.
*) I always wanted to come here, I'm waiting wait for this trip since I was five.
*) How pass next to that ? (Je n'ai pas compris la phrase)
*) Youwill never guess what it happens last night.
*) It happens that I am in a place extraordinary.
*) I've metso much nice people.
*) It's so wonderful that's why Ihave taken took photos for you.
*) Ihave visited ..., it's was so interested.
*) I have seen Manhattan during a cruiseon a in riverboat.
*) Iwill want to make do a another trip to in california, I will want to see the Death Valler.
*) Thereis are so many people.
*) I've read your letter, it's make me happy. (Je n'ai pas trouvé)
*) Ilive am in a hotel since Wednesday.
*) The freedom's statue issuch a very hight building.
*) I saw the place where the twin Towershave fallen fall.
*) We've been there with your parents there is such a long time. (Pas réussi)
*) How are you ? Me I'm fine, Ispend past my holidays in New York.
*) It's very beautiful. (Je comprends pas, la phrase est normal non ?)
*) After,I was visiting I have visited the empire State Building.
*) this first days of my holydays are very good, i don't want to come back at home. Today, I go to the city to do shopping so bye bye. (la phrase là, je n'ai pas compris ^^')
*) I took the plane of Paris to gothere here
*) At time of theatterrissage landing, I saw...
*) Ihad have never been in the U.S.A, it was extraordinary.
*) There are so many things to be made. (Je n'ai pas compris la phrase)
Voila ! Est-ce que j'ai bien corrigé ? Et si non, vous pouvez me dire la correction exacte s'il vous plaît !
Merci
Message de lodi posté le 18-02-2009 à 17:30:15 (S | E | F)
Bonjour ! Je dois corriger une lettre qu'une personne à écrite à un ami (La personne étant à New York) Toutes les phrases ont quelques chose à corriger. Ce qui est en noir est la lettre d'origine et en vert ce que moi je pense être la meilleure tournure de phrase. Voici la lettre:
*)
*) I
*) I am
*) It is
*) Since I have arrived, I have done new friends.
*) Do you know
*) All of American citizens (Celle-la je n'ai pas compris la phrase)
*) I already like
*) Sorry but I lef you. (Je ne sais pas ce que veux dire "lef", dans le dictionnaire il n'y a pas)
*) I
*) I always want
*) How pass next to that ? (Je n'ai pas compris la phrase)
*) You
*) It happens that I am in a place extraordinary.
*) I've met
*) It's so wonderful that's why I
*) I
*) I have seen Manhattan during a cruise
*) I
*) There
*) I've read your letter, it's make me happy. (Je n'ai pas trouvé)
*) I
*) The freedom's statue is
*) I saw the place where the twin Towers
*) We've been there with your parents there is such a long time. (Pas réussi)
*) How are you ? Me I'm fine, I
*) It's very beautiful. (Je comprends pas, la phrase est normal non ?)
*) After,
*) this first days of my holydays are very good, i don't want to come back at home. Today, I go to the city to do shopping so bye bye. (la phrase là, je n'ai pas compris ^^')
*) I took the plane of Paris to go
*) At time of the
*) I
*) There are so many things to be made. (Je n'ai pas compris la phrase)
Voila ! Est-ce que j'ai bien corrigé ? Et si non, vous pouvez me dire la correction exacte s'il vous plaît !
Merci
Réponse: Correction- A letter from New York de linsey34, postée le 18-02-2009 à 21:31:45 (S | E)
Dear lodi,
*) Dear ...
*) I arrived in New York one week ago and I am very excited.
*) I am enthusiastic but effrayed afraid too.
*) It is a new life wich begin. which begins
*) Since I
*) Do you know what the "American Dream" is?
*) All
*) I already like this island very much.
*) Sorry but I lef you. (Je ne sais pas ce que veux dire "lef", dans le dictionnaire il n'y a pas)ça ne veut rien dire !! peut être left
*) I
*) I have always wanted to come here, I've been waiting for this trip since I am five.
*) How pass next to that ? (Je n'ai pas compris la phrase) How did you...? j'ai aussi du mal !
*) You will never guess what
*)
*) I've met so much many nice people.
*) It's so wonderful that's why I took photos for you.
*) I visited ..., it's was so interested. interesting
*) I have seen saw Manhattan during a cruise on a
*) I
*) There are so many people.
*) I've read your letter, it's make it made me happy. (Je n'ai pas trouvé)
*) I live in a hotel since Wednesday.
*) The freedom's statue of liberty is such a
*) I saw the place where the twin Towers have fallen fall. fell
*) We've been there with your parents
*) How are you ? I'm fine, I spend spent
*) It's very beautiful. (Je comprends pas, la phrase est normal non ?)
*) After, I
*) this The first days of my holydays are very good, i don't want to come back
*) I took the plane of from Paris to go there
*) At the time of the
*) I had
*) There are so many things to be made done. (Je n'ai pas compris la phrase)
Réponse: Correction- A letter from New York de azer3, postée le 18-02-2009 à 21:58:12 (S | E)
Bonjour,
*) Sorry but I lef you./ici je crois que c'est sorry because I left you.
*) I always wanted to come here, I'm waiting wait for this trip since I was five./ici c'est le "present perfect continuous" pour to wait.
*)How pass next to that ?/je propose "what passed after that?"
*) You will never guess what happened last night./Je vois qu'ont garde l'indication de future "will"
It happens that I am in a place extraordinary./Le verbe est mal conjugué+ l'adjective se palce avant le sujet.
*) It's so wonderful that's why I have taken took photos for you./Nom ce n'est pas le "present" au debut de la phrase.
I have visited ..., it's was so interested./"so interesting"
*) I have seen Manhattan during a cruise on a in riverboat./Je crois que "on" est plus correcte.
*) I will want to make do a another trip to in california, I will want to see the Death Valler. to want au passé/ "to california" et nom pas "in"
*) I've read your letter, it's make me happy./to make au passé
*) I live am in a hotel since Wednesday./"to live" au "present continous"
*) We've been there with your parents there is such a long time. "for" à la palce de "there is such"
*) How are you ? Me I'm fine, I spend past my holidays in New York./"Spend" est plus correct
*) this first days of my holydays are very good, i don't want to come back at home. Today, I go to the city to do shopping so bye bye./I/ I will go
*) I took the plane of Paris to go there here/from Paris peut être
Voilà.
I hope this helps.
