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Message de misterg posté le 11-02-2009 à 16:23:03 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai réalisé un texte sur l'explication d'un système. SI vous avez le temps pourriez-vous me dire si cela est juste.
May I have your attention please.
The cause of pollution can be classifed under two categories, namely nature of fuel end efficency of combustion.
Optical diagnostic can be defined as measurement of heat on laser. The main feature of optical diagnostic resides in it isn't disturbing the meduim observed. The diagnostic works according to this law the first law of optics. This law is the wavelength of a laser is modified by the composition of the medium. it is designed to measure temperature in the combustion chamber.
The set-up includes the combustion chamber, the detector amplifier and the computer. Let's me describe the process : to start with laser send beam. Secondly beam go through quartz windows of the combustion chamber.
The following step detector is piked up optical signal. Next, electronic signal is transformed into optical signal. Then electronic signal is boosted amplifier. Afterwards digital data are transformed into signal. Finally computer is processed digital data.
I wouls like to stress that laser are used extensively in research labs. You noter that laser provi accurate and reliable measurements.
Thank you for attention.
Do you have any question.
Merci d'avance pour vos conseil.
Message de misterg posté le 11-02-2009 à 16:23:03 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai réalisé un texte sur l'explication d'un système. SI vous avez le temps pourriez-vous me dire si cela est juste.
May I have your attention please.
The cause of pollution can be classifed under two categories, namely nature of fuel end efficency of combustion.
Optical diagnostic can be defined as measurement of heat on laser. The main feature of optical diagnostic resides in it isn't disturbing the meduim observed. The diagnostic works according to this law the first law of optics. This law is the wavelength of a laser is modified by the composition of the medium. it is designed to measure temperature in the combustion chamber.
The set-up includes the combustion chamber, the detector amplifier and the computer. Let's me describe the process : to start with laser send beam. Secondly beam go through quartz windows of the combustion chamber.
The following step detector is piked up optical signal. Next, electronic signal is transformed into optical signal. Then electronic signal is boosted amplifier. Afterwards digital data are transformed into signal. Finally computer is processed digital data.
I wouls like to stress that laser are used extensively in research labs. You noter that laser provi accurate and reliable measurements.
Thank you for attention.
Do you have any question.
Merci d'avance pour vos conseil.
Réponse: Correction texte de asmatique92, postée le 11-02-2009 à 17:30:13 (S | E)
ses trop facile :
Réponse: Correction texte de inga, postée le 11-02-2009 à 18:18:50 (S | E)
I'd like to provide you with some useful phrases that you could add to your presentation:
To introduce the topic:
The subject/topic of my presentation is...
I'll be taking about...
What I'd like to present to you today is...
Today I'm going to talk about
Structuring your presentation:
In my presentation I'll focus on two major issues.
I've divided my presentation into two main parts: x,y.
Sequencing
I'll begin/start off by... Then I'll move on to...
Then/Next/After that, I'll go on to..
To finish
That brings me to the end of my presentation.
That covers all I wanted to say.
That completes my presentation.
Thank you all for your (kind) attention
Questions
Are there any questions?
We just have time for a few questions.
And now I'll be happy to answer any questions you may have.
Try to make use of those phrases to make your presentation more professional. there are some other points that should be included in a good presentation, if you need further help, you can contact me through private messages.
INGA
Réponse: Correction texte de azer3, postée le 11-02-2009 à 20:08:14 (S | E)
Bonjour,
May I have your attention please.
The cause of pollution can be classifed
under two categories, namely nature of fuel end efficency of combustion.Optical diagnostic can be defined as
measurement of heat on laser. The main feature of optical diagnostic resides in it isn't disturbing the meduim observed. The diagnostic works according to this law the first law of optics. This law is the wavelength of a laser is modified by the composition of the medium. it is designed to measure temperature in the combustion chamber.The set-up includes the combustion chamber, the detector amplifier and the computer. Let's me
describe the process : to start with laser send beam. Secondly beam go through quartz windows of the combustion chamber.The following step detector is piked up optical signal. Next, electronic signal is transformed into optical signal. Then electronic signal is boosted
amplifier. Afterwards digital data are transformed into signal. Finally computer is processed digital data.I wouls
like to stress that laser are used extensively in research labs. You noter that laser provi accurate and reliable measurements.Thank you for
attention.Do you have any question.
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Allez corriges toi.Amicalement.
