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Message de english92 posté le 07-02-2009 à 15:36:32 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous !
Voila j'ai une lettre à écrire et j'aimerai qu'on me corrige les fautes d'orthographes s'il-vous plait
Dear Vladimir,
What an eventful experience I had! I have to speak to you about my new life and about what happened at Ellis-Island. First of all, was nightmarish over there. My father, like the other immigrants, had to answer many questions coming from officers as well as to pass a medical examination to be allowed to enter the country. As for me, the doctor examined me and he discovered I had a cold. He thus said to me that I couldn't leave with my father. At that moment there, I cried and begged because I was terrified to be all alone in this strange place. When I felt better, I was allowed to enter America. On the whole, I felt sad to stay on Ellis Island.
However, I don't regret my new life in New-York. There are so many foreigners here and New-york it's known for the most famous skyscrapers which are in Manhattan as the Empire State Bulding. The life is very different from Poland because American is a land of opportunity that's why I want to start from scratch here. There isn't very for a long time, I sang in a temple. At that moment, I felt a rush of joy. I hope to scratch a living and fulfil a dream. At any rate, know that I don't forget you. I'm looking forward to hearing you.
Your best friend
Seymour
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Modifié par english92 le 07-02-2009 16:44
Message de english92 posté le 07-02-2009 à 15:36:32 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous !
Voila j'ai une lettre à écrire et j'aimerai qu'on me corrige les fautes d'orthographes s'il-vous plait
Dear Vladimir,
What an eventful experience I had! I have to speak to you about my new life and about what happened at Ellis-Island. First of all, was nightmarish over there. My father, like the other immigrants, had to answer many questions coming from officers as well as to pass a medical examination to be allowed to enter the country. As for me, the doctor examined me and he discovered I had a cold. He thus said to me that I couldn't leave with my father. At that moment there, I cried and begged because I was terrified to be all alone in this strange place. When I felt better, I was allowed to enter America. On the whole, I felt sad to stay on Ellis Island.
However, I don't regret my new life in New-York. There are so many foreigners here and New-york it's known for the most famous skyscrapers which are in Manhattan as the Empire State Bulding. The life is very different from Poland because American is a land of opportunity that's why I want to start from scratch here. There isn't very for a long time, I sang in a temple. At that moment, I felt a rush of joy. I hope to scratch a living and fulfil a dream. At any rate, know that I don't forget you. I'm looking forward to hearing you.
Your best friend
Seymour
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Modifié par english92 le 07-02-2009 16:44
Réponse: Correction de lettre anglais- de linsey34, postée le 07-02-2009 à 17:51:14 (S | E)
En rouge les erreurs à corriger:
What an eventful experience I had! I have to speak to you about my new life and about what happened at Ellis-Island. First of all, sujet? was nightmarish over there. My father, like the other immigrants, had to answer many questions coming from officers as well as to pass a medical examination to be allowed to enter the country. As for me, the doctor examined me and he discovered I had a cold. He thus said to me that I couldn't leave with my father. At that moment there, I cried and begged because I was terrified to be all alone in this strange place. When I felt better, I was allowed to enter America. On the whole, I felt sad to stay on Ellis Island.
However, I don't regret my new life in New-York. There are so many foreigners here and New-york it's known for the most famous skyscrapers which are in Manhattan as the Empire State Bulding. The life is very different from Poland because American is a land of opportunity that's why I want to start from scratch here. There isn't very for a long time, I sang in a temple. At that moment, I felt a rush of joy. I hope to scratch a living and fulfil a dream. At any rate, know that I don't forget you. I'm looking forward to hearing you.
Réponse: Correction de lettre anglais- de khalid1970, postée le 07-02-2009 à 22:53:43 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Dear Vladimir,
What an eventful experience I had! I have to speak to you about my new life and about what happened at Ellis-Island. First of all,sujet was nightmarish over there. My father, like the other immigrants, had to answer many questions coming from officers as well as to pass a medical examination to be allowed to enter the country( Il serait préferable de mentionner le pays). As for me, the doctor examined me and he discovered I had a cold. He thus said to me that I couldn't leave with my father. At that moment there( There un peu superflu), I cried and begged because I was terrified to be all alone in this strange place. When I felt better, I was allowed to enter America. On the whole, I felt sad to stay on Ellis Island.
However, I don't regret my new life in New-York. There are so many foreigners here and New-york it's known for the most famous skyscrapers which are in Manhattan as the Empire State Bulding Cette partie est à revoir. The life is very different from Poland( implicitement on compare la vie dans les deux pays et non la vie et l'Amérique; cela se comprend, mais grammaticalement ce n'est pas très juste) because American is a land of opportunity that's why I want to start from scratch here. There isn't very for a long time ( a revoir), I sang in a temple. At that moment, I felt a rush of joy. I hope to scratch a living and fulfil a dream. At any rate,sujet know that I don't forget you. I'm looking forward to hearing il manque une préposition you.
Your best friend
Good luck
Réponse: Correction de lettre anglais- de azer3, postée le 08-02-2009 à 17:32:52 (S | E)
Bonjour,
What an eventful experience I had! I have to speak
to you about my new life and about what happened at Ellis-Island. First of all, was nightmarish over there. My father, like the other immigrants, had to answer many questions coming from officers as well as to pass a medical examination to be allowed to enter the country. As for me, the doctor examined me and he discovered I had a cold. He thus said to me that I couldn't leave with my father. At that moment there, I cried and begged because I was terrified to be all alone in this strange place. When I felt better, I was allowed to enter America. On the whole, I felt sad to stay on Ellis Island.However, I don't regret my new life in New-York. There are so many foreigners here and New-york
it's known for the most famous skyscrapers which are in Manhattan as the Empire State Bulding. The life is very different from Poland because American is a land of opportunity that's why I want to start from scratch here. There isn't very for a long time, I sang in a temple. At that moment, I felt a rush of joy. I hope to scratch a living and fulfil a dream. At any rate, know that I don't forget you. I'm looking forward to hearing you.on dit pas speak to you c'est une lettre est n'ont pas une conversation oralele sujet est mal placéon dit pas comming tu dois changer toute la phrase de point de vue constructionto enter...ça manque une propositiondiscovered...ca maque quelque choseça manque une propositionou le majuscule pour la deuxième partie de motlà j'ai pas compris je tu propose "be sure that"...Voilà corriges-toi à la lumière de tous les corrections proposés.
Bon chance.
