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Message de cames6 posté le 06-02-2008 à 17:58:30 (S | E | F)
Hello !
I write the continuation of a story and i like your impressions! Thank's
He returned to the village. He was afraid, he didn’t know what happened now. He knew that the pilots the tubes of blood serum to America brought and he hoped that the researcher find a vaccine but it certenly take time and the situation is already dangerous. When he arrived on the village, he went directly on the hut. The situation had not change. He wanted to help this people particulary the children but there is no solution, he couldn’t do anything. There was no means of communication, he was alone. He could juste hope that the vaccine came not to late. He passed 6 horrible days, each day succumbed people who don’t resist on the virus. The hardest was the children who howl. The seventh days came a van, i didn’t expect that it was doctor with the vaccine. They explained me quickly that the researcher know already this virus. We hurry us for administer the vaccine but it was too late for a lot of people. Only 52 personn survived of the 200.He stayed in the village 1 month again for saw if the virus was good left. Next, he returned in their city. It was very strange for him to return on the simple life ( à la vie de tout les jours )
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Modifié par bridg le 06-02-2008 18:06
Il est demandé aux membres qui auront la gentillesse de répondre de signaler les fautes, d'aider le demandeur à se corriger mais de ne jamais faire le travail à sa place. Cette règle est incontournable sur ce site d'apprentissage. Merci de votre participation.
Message de cames6 posté le 06-02-2008 à 17:58:30 (S | E | F)
Hello !
I write the continuation of a story and i like your impressions! Thank's
He returned to the village. He was afraid, he didn’t know what happened now. He knew that the pilots the tubes of blood serum to America brought and he hoped that the researcher find a vaccine but it certenly take time and the situation is already dangerous. When he arrived on the village, he went directly on the hut. The situation had not change. He wanted to help this people particulary the children but there is no solution, he couldn’t do anything. There was no means of communication, he was alone. He could juste hope that the vaccine came not to late. He passed 6 horrible days, each day succumbed people who don’t resist on the virus. The hardest was the children who howl. The seventh days came a van, i didn’t expect that it was doctor with the vaccine. They explained me quickly that the researcher know already this virus. We hurry us for administer the vaccine but it was too late for a lot of people. Only 52 personn survived of the 200.He stayed in the village 1 month again for saw if the virus was good left. Next, he returned in their city. It was very strange for him to return on the simple life ( à la vie de tout les jours )
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Modifié par bridg le 06-02-2008 18:06
Il est demandé aux membres qui auront la gentillesse de répondre de signaler les fautes, d'aider le demandeur à se corriger mais de ne jamais faire le travail à sa place. Cette règle est incontournable sur ce site d'apprentissage. Merci de votre participation.
Réponse: Redaction de crazy-frog, postée le 07-02-2008 à 22:07:31 (S | E)
Bonjour
je veux bien t'aider à corriger ton devoir. D'abord tu devrais faire attention aux temps des verbes, en utilisant les bons conditionnels quand il le faut. Fais déjà un essai et je te donnerai mon avis si tu veux.
