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Message de desse21 posté le 16-12-2007 à 12:02:27 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour,
J'ai un travail oral à faire, sur n'importe quel thème ; moi, j'ai choisi de parler du business de Noël (c'est d'actualité).
Je sais que je n'ai vraiment pas un bon niveau d'anglais, alors j'aimerais avoir une correction de mon travail.
merci
Aurélie
A majority of French people get ready to celebrate Christmas. 13 million euro, it is what should spend French people to celebrate Christmas, that is a 586-€ average by home. The period is crucial for the shopkeepers; annual economic performance is often determined by results of end of year.
40 % of turnovers of shopkeepers are realized at time of the holiday. The holidays of Christmas are also synonyms for an exceptional meal: oyster, “foie gras”, chocolate and turkey even there it is a beautiful occasion for producers because they realize 50 % of their turnovers.
If the Christian holiday testifies of a firm attachment in traditions, it is also revealing of the morale of population that new tendencies of consumption
Altogether, Europeans are going to be slightly more generous than in 2006, with an average increase of their budget about 2 %. But this figure balanced according to GNP hides disparities between countries: the total amount of the spending indeed varies of e simple in quadruple, according to importance granted(tuned) to the tradition of Christmas as well as the average wealth of the inhabitants.
As example, Irish people plan to spend more double of French budget: they should dedicate 1 339 euro to the presents of end of year, while French are going to spend 586 euro, a relatively stable sum. They are followed by British, who will not hesitate to pay out 1057 .En revenge, our Italian and German neighbours should squeeze up belt. They foresee a decline of 6 % of their spending.
Besides, emerging countries are paradoxically the ones where the volume of the spending should increase most this year, of the order of 12 in 18 %. We make reference to Russia, Greece, Cyprus and South Africa, where new middle classes very avid to reach consumption constitute. The inhabitants do not hesitate to spend until 13 % of their incomes, against only 2 % for French people. It is the weakest rate in Europe after that of the Dutch people.
Merry Christmas
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Modifié par bridg le 16-12-2007 12:04
Il est demandé aux membres qui auront la gentillesse de répondre de signaler les fautes, d'aider le demandeur à se corriger mais de ne jamais faire le travail à sa place. Cette règle est incontournable sur ce site d'apprentissage. Merci de votre participation.
Réponse: travail oral de desse21, postée le 18-12-2007 à 19:21:37 (S | E)
Je passe à l'oral jeudi et je ne suis vraiment pas sûre de moi. J'ai vraiment besoin de votre aide.
Aurélie
Réponse: travail oral de mainmise, postée le 19-12-2007 à 00:56:01 (S | E)
Bonjour! Je peut vous aider! 
A majority of French people get ready to celebrate Christmas. 13
million euro, it is what should spend French people spend to celebrate
Christmas, that is a 586-€ average by home. This period is crucial for
the shopkeepers; annual economic performance is often determined by end of year results.
40 % of shopkeepers' profits are made during the holiday.
The Christmas holiday is also synonymous for an exceptional meal:
oyster, “foie gras”, chocolate and turkey even this is a good
occasion for producers because they make 50 % of their profits. (desolée mais je ne sais pas quoi vous voulez dire ici! Je l'ai changé mais je ne sais pas si c'est exactament quoi vous voulez...)
If the Christian holiday testifies of a firm attachment in traditions,
it is also reveals of the morale of population that new tendencies of
consumption. (je ne sais pas quois vous voulez ici aussi)
Altogether, Europeans are going to be slightly more generous than in
2006, with an average increase in their budget of about 2 %. But this
figure balanced according to GNP hides disparities between countries:
the total amount of the spending indeed varies of e simple in
quadruple, according to importance granted(tuned) to the tradition of
Christmas as well as the average wealth of the inhabitants.
For example, Irish people plan to spend more than double the French budget:
they (c'est "will dedicate" ou seulment "deidcate" ça depend quoi vous voulez dire) dedicate 1 339 euro to the end of year presents, while
the French are going to spend 586 euro, a relatively stable (c'est pas "stable" peut-être "small") sum. They are
followed by the British, who will not hesitate to pay out 1057 euro. In revenge,
our Italian and German neighbours should squeeze up thier belts. They foresee
a decline of 6 % of their spending.
Besides, emerging countries are paradoxically the ones where the volume
of the spending should increase most this year, of the order of 12 in
18 %. For example (? c'est ça que vous voulez dire?) Russia, Greece, Cyprus and South Africa,
where new middle classes very avid to reach consumption constitute. The
inhabitants do not hesitate to spend until 13 % of their incomes, compared to only 2 % for French people. It is the lowest rate in Europe
after that of the Dutch people.
Merry Christmas
J'espère que ça vous aidera! Si vous avez des questions sur les corrections, demandez-les à moi!
Réponse: travail oral de desse21, postée le 19-12-2007 à 10:00:45 (S | E)
merci je suis très satisfaite de votre aide. tout est très clair.
merci et bonne fête de fin d'année.
Aurélie
Réponse: travail oral de desse21, postée le 19-12-2007 à 10:32:56 (S | E)
en faite j'ai une question !!!
je sais pas si je dois mettre "french people", "irish people" , "dutch people" ou bien si je peux mettre seulement french, irish, dutch. et met on THE devant??
MERCI
Réponse: travail oral de williamengland, postée le 21-12-2007 à 18:22:38 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
The French, the Irish etc., ou English people, Italian neighbours etc.
Mais pas French, English, sans "the".
You might want to check your maths, I think it might be 13 billion euros. (Milliards pas millions).
W.
