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Message de razorlight15 posté le 03-11-2007 à 10:42:00 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour tout le monde j'ai une dissertation à rendre en anglais mais comment j'ai beaucoup de problème d'expression j' aimerais bien que vous jetiez un oeil
!!
Le sujet est : have you ever had to overcome an obstacle in your life?
Et voici ce que j'ai mis:
Life would be so easy and so nice without obstacles and without tests to be overcome but dan daily life it is not case, life is seeded with ambuches. to which it is necessary to make face. Me sixteen-year-old teenager I have deja known a real obstacle where it a to cancel that I fight with my feelings. Indeed with l' seven years age j'ai lost my large parents nursery schools, that m'a caused a vacuum and an immense difficulty to accept l'inaceptable then with the wire of the months and years j'ai been able to live again and acepter death.
In the announcement of the decease of my big parents from the top of my seven years, a lot of questions and incomprehensions bumped into each other in my head. My parents tried to protect me from shock while explaining me the death of my big parents but I did not want to understand, I folded up on myself, rest the only and crying very often because I had lived a small childhood very cosseted by my big parents. In the depths of me I did not want all this to stop but life is sometimes cruel and it is necessary to make him face. It is so over the years, thanks to help of my parents and the intervention of a psychologist whom I could understand and accept this lack. I could then share mourning with my family and turn me to healing. I agreed then to speak about them, to look at photographs, to go to the graveyard. This healing is therefore crossed by by dialogue and numerous exchanges with young persons and adults.
This event is very painful and this can arrive at everybody. This one changes our life and especially our manner of seeing and thinking of things.
Meric de me corriger autant que possible parce qu'il ya surement plein de fautes d'expréssion!
Merci!
razorlight
Message de razorlight15 posté le 03-11-2007 à 10:42:00 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour tout le monde j'ai une dissertation à rendre en anglais mais comment j'ai beaucoup de problème d'expression j' aimerais bien que vous jetiez un oeil
!!Le sujet est : have you ever had to overcome an obstacle in your life?
Et voici ce que j'ai mis:
Life would be so easy and so nice without obstacles and without tests to be overcome but dan daily life it is not case, life is seeded with ambuches. to which it is necessary to make face. Me sixteen-year-old teenager I have deja known a real obstacle where it a to cancel that I fight with my feelings. Indeed with l' seven years age j'ai lost my large parents nursery schools, that m'a caused a vacuum and an immense difficulty to accept l'inaceptable then with the wire of the months and years j'ai been able to live again and acepter death.
In the announcement of the decease of my big parents from the top of my seven years, a lot of questions and incomprehensions bumped into each other in my head. My parents tried to protect me from shock while explaining me the death of my big parents but I did not want to understand, I folded up on myself, rest the only and crying very often because I had lived a small childhood very cosseted by my big parents. In the depths of me I did not want all this to stop but life is sometimes cruel and it is necessary to make him face. It is so over the years, thanks to help of my parents and the intervention of a psychologist whom I could understand and accept this lack. I could then share mourning with my family and turn me to healing. I agreed then to speak about them, to look at photographs, to go to the graveyard. This healing is therefore crossed by by dialogue and numerous exchanges with young persons and adults.
This event is very painful and this can arrive at everybody. This one changes our life and especially our manner of seeing and thinking of things.
Meric de me corriger autant que possible parce qu'il ya surement plein de fautes d'expréssion!
Merci!
razorlight
Réponse: DM anglais de shamrock72, postée le 03-11-2007 à 16:48:28 (S | E)
Comment se fait-il qu'il y ait autant de mots français dans cette production??
Attention aux traducteurs "informatisés".
Réfléchis à ce que tu veux dire, au sens général de ta phrase; cela suppose un minimum de réflexion.
Ensuite utilise un bon dictionnaire si nécessaire, mais essaie de faire appel à tes connaissances dans un premier temps.
Réponse: DM anglais de kevin54, postée le 03-11-2007 à 17:18:38 (S | E)
salut !!
Je trouve que tu as trop de mots francais !!!
Certaines phrases sont mal formulées, c'est souvent ce qui se passe avec un traducteur du genre google ou yahoo !!
Reprends ta rédaction à zéro en t'aidant tout simplement d'un dictionnaire.
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