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Une expression écrite à corriger
Message de anais121 posté le 02-10-2005 à 15:45:25 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour
Pourriez vous me corriger mon expression écrite s'il vous plait
Then it should make savings in water, by collecting rainwater to sprinkle the plants, to take showers instead of baths. And from the shorter showers bus water will become rare in several years. The man cannot stop the dryness but it can preserve water to attenuate the dryness because the dryness makes fires and thus destroyed nature. Then the man should become aware of all waste which they leave in nature. Waste pollutes because they put million years to be destroyed. Today there is the selectif sorting thus the man should make the selective sorting because that would make it possible to recycle papers, glasses etc.... They should also use the dustbins of the streets instead of leaving them by ground.
They should also pay attention to their daily gestures. The domestic products, the bombs aerosols are very dangerous for the layer of ozone. They pollute planets with all their molecules which destroys planet.
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Edité par bridg le 02-10-2005 15:46
titre / les majuscules servent à crier sur le site, ce n'est pas nécessaire ici.
Message de anais121 posté le 02-10-2005 à 15:45:25 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour
Pourriez vous me corriger mon expression écrite s'il vous plait
Then it should make savings in water, by collecting rainwater to sprinkle the plants, to take showers instead of baths. And from the shorter showers bus water will become rare in several years. The man cannot stop the dryness but it can preserve water to attenuate the dryness because the dryness makes fires and thus destroyed nature. Then the man should become aware of all waste which they leave in nature. Waste pollutes because they put million years to be destroyed. Today there is the selectif sorting thus the man should make the selective sorting because that would make it possible to recycle papers, glasses etc.... They should also use the dustbins of the streets instead of leaving them by ground.
They should also pay attention to their daily gestures. The domestic products, the bombs aerosols are very dangerous for the layer of ozone. They pollute planets with all their molecules which destroys planet.
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Edité par bridg le 02-10-2005 15:46
titre / les majuscules servent à crier sur le site, ce n'est pas nécessaire ici.
Réponse: Une expression écrite à corriger de lucile83, postée le 02-10-2005 à 16:08:37 (S | E)
Hello,
Je viens de corriger .....mais il reste beaucoup de maladresses à moins de tout remanier; je n'ai pas voulu le faire car tu dois apprendre par toi-même et de toute façon je pense que ton professeur n'aurait pas été dupe
Bon courage !
Then we should save water, by collecting rain to sprinkle the plants, having showers instead of baths. And from the shorter showers bus water will become rare in several years ???? je ne comprends pas cette phrase . Man cannot stop dryness but he can preserve water to attenuate it because dryness makes fires and thus destroys nature. Then man should become aware of all waste which they leave in nature. Waste pollutes because they put million years to be destroyed. Today there is the selective sorting thus the man should make the selective sorting because that would make it possible to recycle papers, glasses etc.... They should also use the dustbins in the streets instead of leaving them on the ground.
They should also pay attention to their daily gestures. The domestic products, the bomb aerosols are very dangerous for the layer of ozone. They pollute planets with all their molecules which destroy planet.
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