Correction d'un texte en anglais
Message de remy posté le 22-11-2005 à 16:54:09 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour,

Tout d'abord je vous remercie de prendre le temps de me lire et j'aimerais savoir s'il est possible de me corriger mon texte.

Je l'ai traduit du français vers l'anglais mais il doit comporter pas mal de fautes.

Donc si vous pouvez me le corriger je vous serais très reconnaissant. Merci.

Donc le texte parle d'une "peinture" je vous mets les liens où vous pouvez la voir (ça peut aider pour la traduction; car il est possible que je ne sois pas toujours clair) :
Lien Internet
et Lien Internet


Le texte donne :
"I will present to you the painting which I made with the website Mrpicassohead. The scene is very simple. We can see two characters back to back. On the left, we can imagine that it is a man. He wears a coat and holds a knife in his hand. On the right, we can recognize a woman dressed up as in the Seventies with a beret. The dark side of painting lets imagine that the scene takes place the evening. Perhaps in a cellar, where the light would return only by one small window. Why the people are back to back? Why the man holds a knife in his hand? Does he intend to kill the woman? But in this case, why the man would be back to back with her and why the knife would be on the left and not near to the woman? The history doesn’t hold water. Perhaps people want to commit suicide? We can imagine, for example, that the lady already inserted her knife. The light could thus symbolize the way towards the death. However, it is strange that people are still standing. There must be another explanation well. Someone have an idea? Thus, this painting inspires a side obscure, in particular by the presence of the knife. ut what means this knife? Why is it directed upwards? Does it try to show us something? What means this scribble in the top left? What is the symbolic? Perhaps, this painting isn’t so dark and hides a share of secret. Thus, if we turn the painting, we can see another scene. We don’t see any more two people back to back but two people face to face exchanging a glance. The knife is in fact only a jewel. And the features which could make think of the death represent only a heart with the face of people. But what does this scribble represent in the bottom right? It is in fact the painting’s signature. We can recognize the letters L O V E."

Merci beaucoup, Rémy

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Edité par lucile83 le 22-11-2005 16:59

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Edité par bridg le 30-11-2005 21:38
A la demande de webmaster il est demandé aux membres de ne plus corriger les textes complets des devoirs ni les dissertations et ce, dans un souci d'équité envers les autres élèves n'ayant pas accès à Internet.